I looked out the window, and saw that we were over the ocean. I saw a green lush area coming towards us. there were many different kids on the plane. some a little older than me, and some younger, MUCH younger. I heard over the clamor from the engines, "we are dropping altitude, FAST!" I suddenly became very cold and started to quiver, not only from the coldness but from the fear of what was happening. I started to speculate weather I was going live any longer. I stared out the window, once more and everything started to blend together. Black spots came over my eyes, and I was gone.
"HMMM" I smelled bananas, and pineapple, and all different types of sweet fruits. I gazed at all of the other people on the plane and they had pallor looks upon their faces. I quickly started to unbuckle my belt and clamber out of the plane. I looked around and saw a jumbled mess of vines, and wild fruit plants surrounding me. When I looked into the dense jungle, the trees and vinse and floor plants were interposing any type of path, or way to get away from the burning plane.
Out from the jungle I could hear a strident sound, loud and clear. I began to navigate to it's direction. I thought to my self, I could eat a whole stake plus patatos, no...I could devour a horse! I was famished. I was grating through the lush and finally saw a sparkle from the lagoon, I saw many different kids, some that I recognized. I begane to hear a loud group of people coming from behind me.
I saw a bunch of older boys coming outof the jungle. they all walked vainly across the snow white sand. From what I saw they had decorous clothing on. colorful and interesting. I felt strong indignation for them. They had walked right in front of me and did not even spare a passing glance. this was just rude!
My time on this island will soonly be changed.
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The Interview with Simon
Q) What is your opinion about the signal fire?
A) Well, when I first herd the idea from Ralph, I did not know what to think. I had this thought in the back of my head, that something was going to go wrong. And it did after the first try. After we started it up again we had a good fire going. And yet the littleuns’ let it out again, when they went to follow jack. It is getting annoying how jack is always trying to take the leader position from Ralph. But Ralph is sticking it out, and not taking attitude from anyone.
Q) Do you think that you would make a better leader than Ralph?
A) Well I don’t think that I would always have everyone’s best interests. I don’t know if I would even know how to act with everyone yelling at me like they yell at Ralph. When I hold the conch, I feel as if I have all the power and then Ralph steals it back, and I don’t know if I would want to let anyone else have the power if I was the leader. But when jack has the conch he does not give it back, and I think that is how I would react to have all of the power over the hunters and the littleuns’.
Q) Do you believe that you will be rescued?
A) oh, that is a good question, um…you know I am not sure. I mean, this island has to be recorded on some map, somewhere on this earth. But considering that there was a “ship” that went buy, then I am considering that some day a while from now, yes we will be rescued. All we really have to do it just keep that fire going, and make sure that we have plenty of smoke for what ever will be rescuing us to see.
Q) What do you think about the beast? Do you think that there is a chance there is a beast on the island? Also what would you tell the littleuns’?
A) Personally I think that there is definitely a chance of a beast being on the island. We just have to figure out where it lives. And I am thinking that it may very well be in the water, because we have searched all over this island. I think that the littleuns’ have a lot of fear from the thought of the beast. But they really have nothing to be afraid of.
Q) What is your opinion on the island?
A) Well I like it. It gives me a lot of times to think buy my self. And I don’t have anyone telling me what to do; I just sit around listening to the animals life around me and relax. I really don’t enjoy working a lot, but when someone needs my help. Then I will help them. I just like to be alone, doing my own thing. That’s just me.
A) Well, when I first herd the idea from Ralph, I did not know what to think. I had this thought in the back of my head, that something was going to go wrong. And it did after the first try. After we started it up again we had a good fire going. And yet the littleuns’ let it out again, when they went to follow jack. It is getting annoying how jack is always trying to take the leader position from Ralph. But Ralph is sticking it out, and not taking attitude from anyone.
Q) Do you think that you would make a better leader than Ralph?
A) Well I don’t think that I would always have everyone’s best interests. I don’t know if I would even know how to act with everyone yelling at me like they yell at Ralph. When I hold the conch, I feel as if I have all the power and then Ralph steals it back, and I don’t know if I would want to let anyone else have the power if I was the leader. But when jack has the conch he does not give it back, and I think that is how I would react to have all of the power over the hunters and the littleuns’.
Q) Do you believe that you will be rescued?
A) oh, that is a good question, um…you know I am not sure. I mean, this island has to be recorded on some map, somewhere on this earth. But considering that there was a “ship” that went buy, then I am considering that some day a while from now, yes we will be rescued. All we really have to do it just keep that fire going, and make sure that we have plenty of smoke for what ever will be rescuing us to see.
Q) What do you think about the beast? Do you think that there is a chance there is a beast on the island? Also what would you tell the littleuns’?
A) Personally I think that there is definitely a chance of a beast being on the island. We just have to figure out where it lives. And I am thinking that it may very well be in the water, because we have searched all over this island. I think that the littleuns’ have a lot of fear from the thought of the beast. But they really have nothing to be afraid of.
Q) What is your opinion on the island?
A) Well I like it. It gives me a lot of times to think buy my self. And I don’t have anyone telling me what to do; I just sit around listening to the animals life around me and relax. I really don’t enjoy working a lot, but when someone needs my help. Then I will help them. I just like to be alone, doing my own thing. That’s just me.
3 comments:
Your writing is descriptive and detailed. I know how it felt to be on that plane because your writing is powerful.
Kira
"I thought to my self, I could eat a whole stake plus patatos, not i could devour a horse! I was famished. I was grating through the lush and"
I thought that you did a great job using the vocabulary words correctly. Although, on this one part, I was confused. I think you meant you were hungry. Perhaps phrasing it like this:
"As I followed the noise, my stomach grumbled. I kept thinking how I could easily devour a steak, potatoes, and even a horse!"
One last thing. I think that you used the word grating wrong. I think grating in this book is the vines that are letting light in. I personally used it like this:
"As I continued to draw nearer to the noise, the grating of the vines became nuisance as excessive amounts of light shined on my face."
I'm not sure if either of those recommendations are exact or accurate, but I hope they help!
-Nikki
("HMMM" I smelled bananas, and pineapple, and all different types of sweet fruits.)
I found this a very discribtive sentence. I liked how you not only said that it was scary to be on a new island but you described it through smell rather then seeing. I also liked how you would blend in the vocab word together rather then just throwing them in to throw them in. Next time I would introduce a charater. We don't know who we are reading about or how he looks. Other then that I can't complain much so...
good job, from Leyla
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